白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-12 06:40:18 Post subject: 指痕 |
|
|
指痕
__这是一枚深深埋藏的指痕
那年, 那风
那呜咽的风
吹碎了深秋的葡萄
从此, 失明的眼睛葬了暗红
一路追寻
曾经的迷惘, 坠落
还有照亮冷夜的莹火
一个孩子
一个另类空间的孩子
一枚渐渐淡去的
指纹
在那个冬日
点燃御寒的衣
用坦诚, 用炙热
连同青春的逝
灰烬的余烟
袅袅, 卷起
那首歌, 那首叛逆的歌
那首
用折断的白骨, 对
是你
宁愿折断也不愿弯曲的白骨
鸣响第五维空间的
回声
疯人院的大墙
隔断了两个世界
夜
深了
我的心在问
是你, 还是门外的人
昏睡或是
醒着 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
lihan 童生
Joined: 12 Jul 2007 Posts: 2
lihanCollection |
Posted: 2007-07-12 07:43:19 Post subject: |
|
|
拜读,欣赏! |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
杯中冲浪 进士出身
Joined: 29 Sep 2006 Posts: 2891 Location: 中国 杯中冲浪Collection |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
山城子 榜眼
Joined: 23 May 2007 Posts: 4771 Location: 中国贵州 山城子Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-12 18:00:12 Post subject: |
|
|
学习了! _________________ 诗是人生的雅伴儿。 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
木易沉香 秀才
Joined: 17 Jun 2007 Posts: 122 Location: 中国河南 木易沉香Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-12 18:06:28 Post subject: |
|
|
思考性很强的诗 欣赏问好 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-12 19:18:30 Post subject: |
|
|
问好新朋友.欢迎多交流 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-12 19:21:01 Post subject: |
|
|
杯中冲浪 wrote: |
用折断的白骨, 对
是你
宁愿折断也不愿弯曲的白骨
鸣响第五维空间的
回声 |
冲浪, 你也太懒了,等你新作.  |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-12 19:22:19 Post subject: |
|
|
问好老师.还请多批评. |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-12 19:24:08 Post subject: |
|
|
木易沉香 wrote: |
思考性很强的诗 欣赏问好 |
问好沉香.多交流 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
阿依琼裙 秀才

Joined: 09 Apr 2007 Posts: 920 Location: 废墟之上 阿依琼裙Collection |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
金金 进士出身

Joined: 08 Feb 2007 Posts: 2035 Location: 山东济宁 金金Collection |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
湘妃123 童生
Joined: 14 Jul 2007 Posts: 11
湘妃123Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-14 01:36:16 Post subject: |
|
|
学习了哈 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-15 06:27:31 Post subject: |
|
|
阿依琼裙 wrote: |
你在詞語和生活的韌性間寫詩~~贊! |
谢谢MM, 这首诗歌是两年前为一位我敬重的诗人写的. |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-15 06:29:12 Post subject: |
|
|
谢谢金金, 是你让我又想起了这首诗歌  |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-15 06:30:00 Post subject: |
|
|
问好新朋友, 多交流.等你的诗歌 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
半溪明月 榜眼

Joined: 30 Sep 2006 Posts: 4760
半溪明月Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-15 08:27:19 Post subject: |
|
|
没怎么读懂,月光能说说写作的背景?  |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
荷梦 进士出身
Joined: 19 Dec 2006 Posts: 2826 Location: 湖北,黄梅 荷梦Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-15 17:50:44 Post subject: |
|
|
到底是谁昏睡还是醒着,有时真的很难说清。 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2007-07-15 18:09:18 Post subject: |
|
|
荷梦 wrote: |
到底是谁昏睡还是醒着,有时真的很难说清。 |
是, 谢谢理解. |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
阿依琼裙 秀才

Joined: 09 Apr 2007 Posts: 920 Location: 废墟之上 阿依琼裙Collection |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
|