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鹧鸪天-阳山桃花节采风记
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PostPosted: 2015-05-31 17:06:22    Post subject: 鹧鸪天-阳山桃花节采风记 Reply with quote

文/梁溪散人
一夜丝风入梦涯,不知吹绽几多花。
芳香泥土亲和甚,礼客贤翁恭让嘉。
身缓步,衣轻纱。桃诗寻觅品新茶。
迟寒笑对三春早,料是红装系彩霞。

由于没有检测,故有出律,现重新发。
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PostPosted: 2015-06-01 07:24:58    Post subject: Reply with quote

待宾客,看落花;读好诗,品香茶。好一幅图画!
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PostPosted: 2015-06-02 00:41:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢庆宏兄赏读、评点鼓励!
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PostPosted: 2015-06-02 01:26:18    Post subject: Reply with quote

诗人采风,韵味特浓。
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PostPosted: 2015-06-02 01:57:21    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢黄老赏读点评鼓励!
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 02:23:53    Post subject: Reply with quote

笑聊老师,后段首句为“可可仄,仄平平”(《钦定词谱》) Laughing
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 03:01:54    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢海蛎子老师指出重点。我用的词谱较《钦定词谱》为严,后段首句是:平仄仄,仄平平。

一夜丝风入梦涯,不知吹绽几多花。
芳香泥土亲和甚,礼客贤翁恭让嘉。
身缓步,衣轻纱。桃诗寻觅品新茶。
迟寒笑对三春早,料是红装系彩霞。

有所改动。
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 03:22:32    Post subject: Reply with quote

笑聊老师,“衣”是失声了耶 Laughing
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 04:07:12    Post subject: Reply with quote

笑聊老师,“衣”是失声了耶 Laughing

衣作名词时读平声;作动词时读去声。

这里的衣,就是穿的意思,作动词使用。

感谢海蛎子老师切磋交流,使我又学到了好多知识。
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 04:29:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

真是耶,“衣”作动词时归去声五未。久不填词,竟然把这个给忘了。随便说一句,词谱没有宽严之说 Laughing
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 16:18:07    Post subject: Reply with quote

海蛎子老师说得对,词谱就是词谱,哪来宽严之说呀。呵,贻笑大方了。
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 16:22:16    Post subject: Reply with quote

很高兴诗友们互相探讨,共同提高。
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 16:34:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

我比较喜欢使用“平仄仄,仄平平”句式,因为可以显摆一下我对联的技巧
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 16:49:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

感谢庆宏兄鼓励!
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 16:50:08    Post subject: Reply with quote

感谢海蛎子老师指点!
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 17:15:52    Post subject: Reply with quote

无锡市阳山镇桃花节(转载)
无锡阳山镇境内的安阳山是华东地区唯一的火岩层山,由距今一点四亿年前的中酸性火山碎屑融合而成,周边土壤肥沃。每年春季,山下桃花怒放,争奇斗艳,把古老的阳山点缀成"桃花源"。

阳山是中国著名的水蜜桃之乡,已有近百年栽培历史的阳山水蜜桃,历来被誉为"果中皇后"、"琼浆玉液",曾被'99昆明世博会指定为唯一的无公害水蜜桃,享有永久冠名权,它以晶莹剔透、皮嫩肉甜而享誉海内外,是无锡农产品的一大品牌。阳山现有水蜜桃种植面积3万亩,其中盛产面积2.5万亩,年产量超过1.5万吨,成为当地农民致富的主要来源之一。

特别是近几年,桃农每年的桃子基本是"桃花刚开,果已卖完",80%阳山水蜜桃都是通过桃花节订单销售的.目前阳山水蜜桃已进入家乐福、麦德龙等大型超市销售。成功的产业化经营,让"果中皇后"阳山水蜜桃真正成了阳山人的摇钱树。据了解,近几年农民种植水蜜桃的平均亩产效益已高达1万元,最高的甚至超过了2万元,阳山农民户均存款也超过了15万元。

阳山水蜜桃有限公司与泰国、台湾客商签订了水蜜桃销售协议。据了解,阳山水蜜桃自2004年起已批量出口到泰国等国家和地区,根据协议,今年出口到海外的阳山水蜜桃将超过50吨。

一棵桃树致富了一方百姓,桃花节成了百姓"致富节"。
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 17:46:39    Post subject: Reply with quote

“晶莹剔透、皮嫩肉甜”——阳山镇有温泉?
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PostPosted: 2015-06-06 19:03:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

是的,还真的有温泉。
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PostPosted: 2015-06-14 16:02:41    Post subject: Reply with quote

阳山好地方,阳山的仙桃致富一方。“红装系彩霞”,读此诗句更令人神往。
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PostPosted: 2015-06-16 16:26:07    Post subject: Reply with quote

阳山好地方,阳山的仙桃致富一方。“红装系彩霞”,读此诗句更令人神往。

感谢晓松赏读并点评鼓励!
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