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秋叶
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PostPosted: 2007-04-19 13:05:21    Post subject: 七律-组 Reply with quote

七律-中秋忆故人

今霄凝望中秋月,跌宕思澜忆故人。
竹马青梅成过梦,旧衣残线尽慈恩。
八千里路终留撼,十载风云本是尘。
心浪渐随长夜去,三杯酹尽泪沾巾。
2002 中秋



七律-台湾岛

几曾鼓浪屿前望, 海峡遥遥雾渺茫。
金马新涛扑旧岸, 玉峰余雪映残阳。
高雄滩外渔帆近, 阿里山中涧水长。
尤念故人北港远, 何时有幸渡重洋?
2003/2/11
玉峰-台湾玉山之峰



七律-步韵和中贞: 苏花公路*

苏花险道贯东州, 裂岸涛声动海流。
削壁千寻飞鸟绝, 悬崖百丈落霞收。
神工运斧惊朝梦, 天堑行车随晚舟。
记取英雄多往事, 丹心碧血写春秋。**
2003/ 3/ 5



七律-圆明新园

嵯峨宫阙入云烟, 柳岸兰亭接画船。
大水法旁清晏暖, 远瀛观内香妃寒。
重金投得几回首, 锦绣堆成一轴连。
鬼火原来烧不尽, 珠江口岸又新园。
2004/02/11



七律-烹蟹

大闸青红并帝皇,1 海河咸淡各留香。
花雕大蒜调佳馔,2 姜片生葱伴上汤。3
隔水清蒸原汁味,4 息炉慢浸嫩脂黄。5
荣华宠辱俱何念, 此物平生最不忘。
2002/9/15
1 大闸蟹,青蟹,红蟹和皇帝蟹 2 花雕蟹 3 姜葱蟹 4 清蒸蟹 5 浸蟹



七律-三棵树*题画

直面汪洋浪正汹, 残岩伫立对霓虹。
万般迷幻空灵后, 四陆沉沦荒野中。
秋水无垠怀旧地, 新枝有节对长空。
何堪媚俗折腰去, 一任豪情笑大风



七律-敬赠潘老

书香门内出奇葩, 并蒂军人教育家。
随步孙文求主义, 弘扬慈爱为中华。
八旬笔墨锁熊虎, 四海亲朋连际涯。
闹市新庐藏旧史, 岭南夕照洒红霞。



七律-回 望

商海浮沉又一年, 风狂浪骤过深渊。
久无雅兴敲新句, 暂有残诗和众贤。
对镜频频凝鬓色, 驱车疾疾越山川。
为谋生计添烦苦, 回首瞻前更失眠。
2006/12

和:去声
一,疾,失:入声
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PostPosted: 2007-04-20 01:38:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

拜读 学习 ;))


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PostPosted: 2007-04-20 04:42:53    Post subject: Reply with quote

秋版的律诗,总是那么浓情厚意、动感超人。拜读!
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PostPosted: 2007-04-21 19:58:32    Post subject: Reply with quote

秋香MM好雅兴, 顶一个 Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-04-21 21:17:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

冰清 wrote:
秋版的律诗,总是那么浓情厚意、动感超人。拜读!


谢谢冰清老师鼓励,也想起了下面这首您喜欢的:



七律-三棵树

直面汪洋浪正汹,残岩伫立对霓虹。
万般迷幻空灵后,四陆沉沦荒野中。
秋水无垠怀旧地,新枝有节对长空。
何堪媚俗折腰去,一任豪情笑大风。
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PostPosted: 2007-04-21 21:18:46    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢kokho,请多斧正。
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PostPosted: 2007-04-21 21:22:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
秋香MM好雅兴, 顶一个 Very Happy


顶得怪难受吧,唐兄呢?叫他换换手。 Laughing
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PostPosted: 2007-04-22 01:07:13    Post subject: Re: 七律-组 Reply with quote

秋叶 wrote:
七律-台湾岛

几曾鼓浪屿前望, 海峡遥遥雾渺茫。
金马新涛扑旧岸, 玉峰余雪映残阳。
高雄滩外渔帆近, 阿里山中涧水长。
尤念故人北港远, 何时有幸渡重洋?
2003/2/11
玉峰-台湾玉山之峰

中間兩聯寫想像中的景物,首尾二聯抒情言事互相呼應并更進一層,可見秋版深得律詩章法的要領。惟玉峰高雄二句稍弱,不如金馬阿里山二句的深意。
秋叶 wrote:
七律-圆明新园

嵯峨宫阙入云烟, 柳岸兰亭接画船。
大水法旁清晏暖,远瀛观内香妃寒。
重金投得几回首, 锦绣堆成一轴连。
鬼火原来烧不尽, 珠江口岸又新园。
2004/02/11

圓明新園我也去過,哪有首句說的那麽雄偉啊? Laughing
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PostPosted: 2007-04-22 04:02:49    Post subject: Reply with quote

秋叶 wrote:
冰清 wrote:
秋版的律诗,总是那么浓情厚意、动感超人。拜读!


谢谢冰清老师鼓励,也想起了下面这首您喜欢的:

七律-三棵树

直面汪洋浪正汹,残岩伫立对霓虹。
万般迷幻空灵后,四陆沉沦荒野中。
秋水无垠怀旧地,新枝有节对长空。
何堪媚俗折腰去,一任豪情笑大风。


雄浑大气,我的确喜欢!
如果再将《三棵树》原画作配上,诗的意蕴、诗人的想象力,
会让我们领会得更深。
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PostPosted: 2007-04-22 06:16:21    Post subject: Reply with quote

我记得白水老师贴过三棵树的画,这首七律三棵树写的真是很棒!
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PostPosted: 2007-04-22 18:03:35    Post subject: Re: 七律-组 Reply with quote

非常谢谢戴玨点评,稍作解释如下:

颌联
金马新涛扑旧岸, 玉峰余雪映残阳。

是指台湾政权的更迭,蒋家王朝的没落。


另:
嵯峨宫阙入云烟, 柳岸兰亭接画船。

该处的部分殿宇是依山而建,当是夸张之说, Laughing

重金投得几回首--指的是在香港拍卖购回的三个被八国联军锯走的喷水的十二生肖的兽头, 我去的时候,有复制品摆在门口。

不当之处,还请多指正,谢谢了。
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PostPosted: 2007-04-22 18:12:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

再谢谢冰清老师和fade兄的鼓励, 敝作是白水老师逼着写的,是否还请她再帮忙,谢谢。
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PostPosted: 2007-04-23 06:59:44    Post subject: Re: 七律-组 Reply with quote

秋叶 wrote:
非常谢谢戴玨点评,稍作解释如下:

颌联
金马新涛扑旧岸, 玉峰余雪映残阳。

是指台湾政权的更迭,蒋家王朝的没落。

這樣就很貼切了,謝謝你的解釋。 Smile
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PostPosted: 2007-04-25 19:18:22    Post subject: Re: 七律-组 Reply with quote

戴玨 wrote:
秋叶 wrote:
非常谢谢戴玨点评,稍作解释如下:

颌联
金马新涛扑旧岸, 玉峰余雪映残阳。

是指台湾政权的更迭,蒋家王朝的没落。

這樣就很貼切了,謝謝你的解釋。 Smile


您是华山派的高手,造诣很深,还请戴兄多指教。
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PostPosted: 2007-04-25 19:26:43    Post subject: Reply with quote

文字很有感情。
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PostPosted: 2007-04-25 19:51:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
秋香MM好雅兴, 顶一个 Very Happy


曾为秋香打擂台,
奇思异想愿天开。
原来香乃师兄扮,
唉!
要是早知何苦来!


网上就是一乐!有时还要自己寻乐。
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PostPosted: 2007-05-14 22:52:54    Post subject: Reply with quote

博弈 wrote:
文字很有感情。


谢谢博弈兄鼓励。
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PostPosted: 2007-05-20 14:42:28    Post subject: Reply with quote

学习了。
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PostPosted: 2007-05-22 22:37:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

晓松 wrote:
白水 Moonlight wrote:
秋香MM好雅兴, 顶一个 Very Happy


曾为秋香打擂台,
奇思异想愿天开。
原来香乃师兄扮,
唉!
要是早知何苦来!


网上就是一乐!有时还要自己寻乐。


谢谢晓松兄,次韵和上一首:

晓松赤膊打擂台,
拳脚威风八面开。
中的原来白水计,
唉!
早知如此为何来?
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PostPosted: 2007-05-22 22:39:28    Post subject: Reply with quote

野航 wrote:
学习了。


野航兄诗笔纯熟,请多赐教。

另, 第一首重字了, 已改。
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