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火与葬

张义和
童生

Joined: 01 Mar 2013
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张义和Collection

Posted: 2013-03-01 18:57:58 Post subject: 火与葬

遇见在火葬场生与死都在点燃遇见的人们都在走一边走进火焰一边走进光亮或者黑暗一个孩子的哭声惊动了黑夜 “爸爸，不怕！爸爸，不怕！” 伤痛太重酒后驾车的出了车祸的怎么会惧怕火焰到死都不清醒的人亲人们感到了恐惧不再寒冷了姑被推进火葬炉时一位侄女对死去的姑姑说不会再寒冷了这是残留在世上的最后的一些温暖我忽然发现世人都这样冷漠才要经受这火的铸锻我想起冬天泥土的温度我睡在泥土里的亲人们是否安然地面上的绿色枝头上的花朵一定是他们呼出的暖或者是他们湿润的眼大娘为远房的大娘送葬大娘很慈爱大娘很陌生以前只见过二次面现在第三次大娘躺在火焰里子孙们跪倒在寒冷里我要为大娘用文字祭奠泥土生长朴素大娘心怀慈善现在亲人们都忙乱着大娘一定看得见寒冬过后后辈们还会来的只是我们脚步轻一些只怕惊了亲人的梦幻 233705 安徽省蚌埠市固镇县连站中学张义和 18255277076

山城子
榜眼

Joined: 23 May 2007
Posts: 4771
Location: 中国贵州
山城子Collection

Posted: 2013-03-02 08:32:35 Post subject:

只是我们脚步轻一些只怕惊了亲人的梦幻 _________________ 诗是人生的雅伴儿。

张义和
童生

Joined: 01 Mar 2013
Posts: 73

张义和Collection

Posted: 2013-03-02 16:47:01 Post subject:

山城子 wrote:

只是我们脚步轻一些
只怕惊了亲人的梦幻

问好诗友！

远狼
秀才

Joined: 04 Nov 2012
Posts: 436
Location: 中国重庆
远狼Collection

Posted: 2013-03-02 18:32:53 Post subject:

第一首有说教的意味了，更喜欢后两首 _________________ __________________________ 诗书短文章，潦草乃为狂。管他载道否，吾趣吾自张。 http://blog.sina.com.cn/huolu9

张义和
童生

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张义和Collection

Posted: 2013-03-03 16:31:33 Post subject:

远狼 wrote:

第一首有说教的意味了，更喜欢后两首

谢谢诗友指正！问好！

钱晓强
秀才

Joined: 01 Mar 2013
Posts: 247
Location: 中国陕西铜川
钱晓强Collection

Posted: 2013-03-03 22:33:27 Post subject:

哀莫大于生死别离。 _________________ 钱晓强的脑子http://blog.sina.com.cn/qxq2

白水
大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006
Posts: 14102
Location: TORONTO
白水Collection

Posted: 2013-03-04 00:53:43 Post subject:

更喜欢第二首，冷与暖，死亡与鲜活的反差，打开了对人性的思考空间

张义和
童生

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张义和Collection

Posted: 2013-03-04 15:29:45 Post subject:

钱晓强 wrote:

哀莫大于生死别离。

谢谢诗友临帖。问好！

张义和
童生

Joined: 01 Mar 2013
Posts: 73

张义和Collection

Posted: 2013-03-04 15:31:21 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

更喜欢第二首，冷与暖，死亡与鲜活的反差，打开了对人性的思考空间

谢谢白水老师关注与鼓励。问好！

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