SLIU
秀才
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SLIU北美枫文集 |
 发表于: 2011-06-27 18:27:49 发表主题: Rainy Season |
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Days
weeks
already a month
molecules and cells
breathe out moldy smells
Winding its way through the mist
the nib, pauses briefly
then slowly
slits the floating dark clouds
Something beams through
Is it sunlight?
The moist-laden air
remains unaffected
On the notepad rests the pen
There is a dewdrop
sparkling
amid the humid atmosphere |
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Lake
举人
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Lake北美枫文集 |
| 发表于: 2011-07-08 05:30:44 发表主题: |
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It reads smoothly.
The nib? Are you talking about the tip of the pen? Are you holding it and writing in the air?
It captured the mood in the rainy season.
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SLIU
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| 发表于: 2011-07-10 18:05:26 发表主题: |
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Thanks a lot Lake!
well, if it gives you that impression.... maybe just delete that word.
all the best! |
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