William Zhou周道模
探花
Joined: 10 Jun 2007
Posts: 3950
Location: 中国四川广汉
William Zhou周道模Collection |
 Posted: 2011-05-04 17:52:37 Post subject: 【汉英微诗】疼 痛 |
 |
|
疼 痛
周道模 著译
闪电穿越身体
心
跳出雷鸣
Pain
Lightning is running through the body
Heart
is beating thunders
2011-4-27
_________________
诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
周道模 |
|
| Back to top |
|
 |
|
|
白水
大学士
Joined: 02 Oct 2006
Posts: 14102
Location: TORONTO
白水Collection |
| Posted: 2011-05-16 12:51:02 Post subject: |
|
|
感觉表达的简洁而准确。英文表述似拟斟酌，比如：
跳出雷鸣 is beating with thunders |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
William Zhou周道模
探花
Joined: 10 Jun 2007
Posts: 3950
Location: 中国四川广汉
William Zhou周道模Collection |
| Posted: 2011-05-17 19:45:41 Post subject: |
|
|
| 白水 Moonlight wrote: |
感觉表达的简洁而准确。英文表述似拟斟酌，比如：
... |
谢谢鼓励！请白水君或其他老师指点我的英语。
_________________
诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
周道模 |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
Lake
举人
Joined: 09 Jan 2007
Posts: 1286
LakeCollection |
| Posted: 2011-06-03 20:16:36 Post subject: |
|
|
我插一嘴：中文我读起来有“心从雷鸣中跳出” 或“心跳的声音如雷鸣”的意思；英文的意思像是“心和雷鸣一起跳"。 是不是？
_________________
the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
博弈
榜眼
Joined: 21 Dec 2006
Posts: 4381
Location: SFO
博弈Collection |
| Posted: 2011-06-03 21:48:25 Post subject: |
|
|
| 白水 Moonlight wrote: |
感觉表达的简洁而准确。英文表述似拟斟酌，比如：
... |
同意。
_________________
（在不斷的審醜裡終將建立起新的審美） |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
William Zhou周道模
探花
Joined: 10 Jun 2007
Posts: 3950
Location: 中国四川广汉
William Zhou周道模Collection |
| Posted: 2011-06-13 18:04:27 Post subject: |
|
|
| Lake wrote: |
| 我插一嘴：中文我读起来有“心从雷鸣中跳出” 或“心跳的声音如雷鸣”的意思；英文的意思像是“心和雷鸣一起跳"。 是不是？ |
Lake 先生好，近段时间编书，没有上来。
你的读意是对的。感觉汉语有丰富的意义，翻出英语就单薄了。英语能否表达出至少这两层含义？
_________________
诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
周道模 |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
|
FAQ
Search
Memberlist
Usergroups
Register
Profile
Log in to check your private messages
Sign in
Album
