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PostPosted: 2007-04-06 13:54:33    Post subject: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

TORONTO明日聚会的朋友, 有诗友打来电话, 希望明日朋友们自携下联相对.

上联: 只怨新婚床太窄
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PostPosted: 2007-04-06 14:45:54    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
TORONTO明日聚会的朋友, 有诗友打来电话, 希望明日朋友们自携下联相对.

上联: 只怨新婚床太窄

这个有点意思. 不过一个上联单了点. 我再加一个难度大一点的上联,一起凑个热闹 (我是去年8月22日想出此上联的). 看这个,
四次拆字上联:

佳人摊佳手, 人又佳, 手又佳.

(当然稍微动些小手术, 就能把“佳人对”变成5次拆字上联, 只是对佳人有些不恭敬.

佳人摊佳手,手又土, 人又土. )

Crying or Very sad Wink Laughing Rolling Eyes
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PostPosted: 2007-04-06 16:10:28    Post subject: Reply with quote

哈, 你真行. 明天我当裁判. 输者罚酒一杯, 歌一支, 舞一曲.
singer cheers party
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PostPosted: 2007-04-06 16:31:25    Post subject: Reply with quote

他乡兄此联真叫难,非高人无以对。我斗胆续一联,只是贴近,不是完对。

佳人摊佳手,人又佳,手又佳
水城皖水流,泉无水,浣无水
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PostPosted: 2007-04-06 17:20:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

晓松 wrote:
他乡兄此联真叫难,非高人无以对。我斗胆续一联,只是贴近,不是完对。

佳人摊佳手,人又佳,手又佳
水城皖水流,浣无水,泉无水


小松, 干嘛不留到明天? 你也想一联, 明天让大家对. Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-04-06 23:14:12    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
TORONTO明日聚会的朋友, 有诗友打来电话, 希望明日朋友们自携下联相对.

上联: 只怨新婚床太窄


临屏先草上续貂:

只怨新婚床太窄
无需旧梦鬓亦香

Laughing Laughing Laughing
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PostPosted: 2007-04-06 23:42:03    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

我以为:

“佳人摊佳手,手又土, 人又土”

作上联为妥,因为上联的结尾字应为仄声,下联的结尾字应为平声,
“只怨新婚床太窄”可作上联, “窄”是入声,旧声韵为仄声。
另外,对联的一般规律是平仄对仗,特别是在主要意群的尾字;词性对偶。
个人所见,仅供参考。

我也出一七绝的后二句,求上二句: Laughing

它朝能见他乡客,
白水晓松秋叶黄。
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PostPosted: 2007-04-07 00:01:30    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

说到对联,记不起我以前在什么地方看到的一上联,我曾经对过,贴出在下,看各位佳对:

进退连还逍遥过
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PostPosted: 2007-04-07 06:31:15    Post subject: Reply with quote

晓松 wrote:
他乡兄此联真叫难,非高人无以对。我斗胆续一联,只是贴近,不是完对。

佳人摊佳手,人又佳,手又佳
水城皖水流,泉无水,浣无水

谢谢晓松回对.想提示一点,所有的字都是从"摊"字拆出来的. 提手,立人, 又 和佳 (或土),所以称拆字对.
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PostPosted: 2007-04-07 08:19:11    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
TORONTO明日聚会的朋友, 有诗友打来电话, 希望明日朋友们自携下联相对.

上联: 只怨新婚床太窄


也来试一下,只当学习:
只怨新婚床太窄
常思旧日梦犹香
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PostPosted: 2007-04-08 07:23:20    Post subject: Reply with quote

对的真有趣
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PostPosted: 2007-04-08 08:53:28    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

秋叶 wrote:
说到对联,记不起我以前在什么地方看到的一上联,我曾经对过,贴出在下,看各位佳对:

进退连还逍遥过

进退连还逍遥过
沉池潜海酒漫游

或是,

进退连还逍遥过
金银铝铁铸錦钱

Embarassed Crying or Very sad Rolling Eyes
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PostPosted: 2007-04-08 16:20:26    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

他乡兄,对得好!再想想,可能还会有对。不过,光顾着对对联,还有件正事儿别耽误了。

白水 Moonlight wrote:

上联: 只怨新婚床太窄

新婚床窄,看似小事,若新娘不满跑回娘家去,事就大了,得想个办法。

听说东海老龙王,
殿内有张白玉床。
闲置多年空摆设,
借来一用又何妨?
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PostPosted: 2007-04-08 17:06:11    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

晓松 wrote:
他乡兄,对得好!再想想,可能还会有对。不过,光顾着对对联,还有件正事儿别耽误了。

白水 Moonlight wrote:

上联: 只怨新婚床太窄

新婚床窄,看似小事,若新娘不满跑回娘家去,事就大了,得想个办法。

听说东海老龙王,
殿内有张白玉床。
闲置多年空摆设,
借来一用又何妨?

呵呵,这个要是让我一对可能就不雅了. 还是回避的好. Embarassed
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PostPosted: 2007-04-08 17:15:20    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

你还记得出上联"只怨新婚床太窄"的人对的下联吗? 我昨天只顾着笑, 没记全. 烦请你贴一下好吗? 谢谢 Wink

他乡客 wrote:
晓松 wrote:
他乡兄,对得好!再想想,可能还会有对。不过,光顾着对对联,还有件正事儿别耽误了。

白水 Moonlight wrote:

上联: 只怨新婚床太窄

新婚床窄,看似小事,若新娘不满跑回娘家去,事就大了,得想个办法。

听说东海老龙王,
殿内有张白玉床。
闲置多年空摆设,
借来一用又何妨?

呵呵,这个要是让我一对可能就不雅了. 还是回避的好. Embarassed
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PostPosted: 2007-04-08 17:27:54    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
你还记得出上联"只怨新婚床太窄"的人对的下联吗? 我昨天只顾着笑, 没记全. 烦请你贴一下好吗? 谢谢 Wink

他乡客 wrote:
晓松 wrote:
他乡兄,对得好!再想想,可能还会有对。不过,光顾着对对联,还有件正事儿别耽误了。

白水 Moonlight wrote:

上联: 只怨新婚床太窄

新婚床窄,看似小事,若新娘不满跑回娘家去,事就大了,得想个办法。

听说东海老龙王,
殿内有张白玉床。
闲置多年空摆设,
借来一用又何妨?

呵呵,这个要是让我一对可能就不雅了. 还是回避的好. Embarassed

好象是什么"板凳宽"... 老了,记不得了. Laughing
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PostPosted: 2007-04-08 17:33:20    Post subject: Reply with quote

好象是什么
盖棺方知板太宽

不准 Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-04-09 11:52:41    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

他乡客 wrote:
秋叶 wrote:
说到对联,记不起我以前在什么地方看到的一上联,我曾经对过,贴出在下,看各位佳对:

进退连还逍遥过

进退连还逍遥过
沉池潜海酒漫游

或是,

进退连还逍遥过
金银铝铁铸錦钱

Embarassed Crying or Very sad Rolling Eyes



进退连还逍遥过
沉池潜海酒漫游
--对仗很好,“池,海,酒”几字对偶尚需推敲,“酒漫游”?


或是,

进退连还逍遥过
金银铝铁铸錦钱
--意义不错,也是词性对偶尚需推敲。

供参考。
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PostPosted: 2007-04-09 11:54:05    Post subject: Reply with quote

只怨新婚床太窄
盖棺方知板太宽

不对 Sad
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PostPosted: 2007-04-09 19:49:18    Post subject: Re: 明日聚会, 有人求联 Reply with quote

秋叶 wrote:
他乡客 wrote:
秋叶 wrote:
说到对联,记不起我以前在什么地方看到的一上联,我曾经对过,贴出在下,看各位佳对:

进退连还逍遥过

进退连还逍遥过
沉池潜海酒漫游

或是,

进退连还逍遥过
金银铝铁铸錦钱

Embarassed Crying or Very sad Rolling Eyes



进退连还逍遥过
沉池潜海酒漫游
--对仗很好,“池,海,酒”几字对偶尚需推敲,“酒漫游”?


或是,

进退连还逍遥过
金银铝铁铸錦钱
--意义不错,也是词性对偶尚需推敲。

供参考。

呵呵,咱自知词性对仗不工整,才红着脸贴上的。 Embarassed 字意很明显,只求醉生梦死,在肉山酒海里漫游。
好,咱再费点脑子,对个词性工整的。想起前年去海南三亚旅游。在天涯海角附近有个旅游点,游人可以享受深海潜水。每位300元人民币。以此为背景对个下联。首先分析上联词性。“进退”可以看成动词。我对“浮沉”。“逍遥过”即是意境,又可看成游戏。我对“浪漫游”。“连还”不好说,可以是动词,付词,甚至名词代表运动(但是应是“连环”,“还”字在此比较牵强)。我对个运动。看这个:

进 退 连 还 逍 遥 过
浮 沉 潜 海 浪 漫 游

横批: 买 一 送 一 (Two for one)

票价请问白水。 Razz Wink
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