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《一枝火焰》 (外三首)
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PostPosted: 2010-03-28 03:56:33    Post subject: 《一枝火焰》 (外三首) Reply with quote

《缤纷的梦》

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这么个季节
石头与天空一对视就会哭泣
拿什么点燃一地的绿
我的睫毛已经长出丰盈的羽翼
你的眼睛里盛满国画大师的墨香
蝴蝶伫立崖边,绝非心存杂念
我只想以优美的舞姿舒卷出季节的美丽
你拆解星星拆解月亮拆解冻僵的河床拆解了春天所有的秘籍
我飞入你的眼眸,翅膀上蘸满浓意
舞动出漫山遍野的浪漫
2010.3.27

《一枝火焰》

本来无缘
如若擦肩而过尘缘里无恨无怨
你为何在我眼睛里点燃一枝火焰
若说,命犯桃花
阳光里我只是和你打一个照面
一切结局竟被你揣在怀里
这个季节我不经意成为世俗的俘虏
赤橙黄绿青蓝紫在桃色里晕眩
所有的过往都被你一一拆散
哪来的艳?
心事全被你点燃
离离的苦不胜遥遥的思念
梦里挑灯卷帘
你把黎明的衣袂点燃
我幻化成一只火狐
醉在天的这边

2010.3.21

《与你相逢》

浪漫是一种臆想
不必穿上节日的盛装
如何摆脱盘丝洞里的妖孽
抹去前世缘分里的胎记
两个人无法彼此面对
却要戴上面具面对整个世界
我该从哪一个句子里走下梦中的楼台
为一生的苦涩抹上重彩
月亮的步子开始迟钝
日子如白驹从指缝里穿去
夜灯泄露了所有的秘密
推窗独坐,无关风月
时光交叠出错误的绚烂
二月的玫瑰与银河里一颗孤星夜夜对酌
2010.3.27

《放飞》

整个上午就这么过去了
我一直坐在你的深度里无法起身
所有的意象都成了金色
昨夜,谁把银河打翻
心思都被你照见
依然置若罔然
是不是就这样让我离开你的视线
离别的痛,唇亡齿寒
一地的油菜花恍若我的思念
那一条湿漉漉的巷子在记忆里千回百转
睫毛挂在水井边
你的影子一直在我的疼痛里深陷
珠泪穿成线
无法打捞起那些似水流年
趟过这一片油菜地
能否找到系在风筝上的那一根红线
让一地的碎金做我飞行的地毯
只想和你见一面
2010.3.21

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PostPosted: 2010-03-28 03:58:26    Post subject: Reply with quote

文中图片本人春游所拍,敬请高人指点!
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PostPosted: 2010-03-28 05:36:47    Post subject: Reply with quote

想象丰富,情思浪漫,有一些现代味。多为叙述语言,且意象不集中,读了印象不是很深。

图片在构图上还可改进,不要太居中。
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PostPosted: 2010-03-28 06:56:39    Post subject: Reply with quote

是山茶花?开得很艳~~
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PostPosted: 2010-03-28 08:03:01    Post subject: Reply with quote

William Zhou周道模 wrote:
想象丰富,情思浪漫,有一些现代味。多为叙述语言,且意象不集中,读了印象不是很深。
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谢谢指点!问好!
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PostPosted: 2010-03-28 08:05:06    Post subject: Reply with quote

安红红 wrote:
是山茶花?开得很艳~~

谢谢红!我也不知是什么花,但山茶花好像不是这样,有人说是观赏桃花。握!
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PostPosted: 2010-03-28 08:54:44    Post subject: Reply with quote

诗意,自然且涵思索。
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