五绝 和白云闲人《人生几何》（古韵英译）

[qinghongh]

五绝 和白云闲人《人生几何》（古韵英译）

文/庆宏

人生有几何？岁月如穿梭。
剑赋青春志，笔吟瀚海歌。

After <Life in the World>

By Qinghong

How long is life in this world?
And the time flies like a shuttle;
Using a sharp sword,
You can realize your dream of young age;
And using a sharp pen,
You can surf on the knowledge ocean like Google!
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After <Life in the World>

By Qinghong

How long is life in this world?
And the time flies like a shuttle;
Your sharp sword,
Can draw a beautiful painting of young age dream;
Your sharp pen,
Can sing a wonderful song of knowledge ocean.
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白云闲人原玉：

人 生 几 何
< 调寄喜迁莺 >

闻莺唱,
展霞光,
酣睡春宵香.
梦中吟得一篇章,
醒后笑情长!

红日朗,
心花放,
北美楓园游荡.
临屏与友和高歌,
人生得几何!

[nightingale2]

喜欢最后一句的翻译，新颖有趣
新春愉快！万事如意！

[qinghongh]

[白水]

Hi， Qingh
A nice poem.


Suggestion:

And the time flies very fast like a shuttle;

Change to

And the time flies like a shuttle;

[Lake]

Just a quick note:

1. I agree with moonlight about removing "very fast", because "flies like a shuttle" implies the meaning of speed.

2. On the whole it reads well, but a bit of paraphrasing rather than translating.
e.g. the first line in Chinese is a question, the English version is a statement.

I'm not good at translation, but just want to tell how I feel.

Thanks for sharing.

Lake
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[qinghongh]

谢谢白水及Lake的建议，修改如上。

[SLIU]

nice little poem...

[qinghongh]

[王国栋]

静心学习，体会老师翻译的五绝，收获很多。
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