Last Night

[白水]

Last Night

It's over
I know, all is done
those white paper gather cloud
falling, slowly
and slowly
as a soft quilt covers on an exhausted body

it is a dream
I know, it's a sweet dream with pain

who is in the cloud and spins wearing a golden skirt
I could not see
you fly by the breeze
and then suddenly disappear

"where are you?"
I cry: " where are you?!"
and I could not see
I cry, again
and again

(March 12/2010 3.30am)

[William Zhou周道模]

last night? It was over?
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诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
周道模

[白水]

[William Zhou周道模]

时态？
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诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
周道模

[白水]

问好道模，时态应该没有问题。

Last-night 用于过去时，可以有两个意思，一个是“昨夜”， 另一个是“最后的夜晚/最后一夜”。 而Last Night 则用于现在时或将来时， 意思是“最后的夜晚/最后一夜”

这也是刚学的。写这首诗歌时才发现不知如何用英文表达泛指的“最后的夜晚”， 请教了好几位中国朋友中的英文高手(出国前的英文老师，或英文专业毕业后出国多年的朋友），大家一起讨论也是个学习的过程。惟有我女儿被我问的不耐烦，只说“这是对的”却道不出所以然来。无奈，只好给一个美国鬼子打电话，他就这么简单的给我说清楚了，晕。英文毕竟不是我们的母语，许多细小的问题，要去学习，习惯，真是很让人头痛。比如第三人称后的动词，谁都知道该怎么用，我却常不介意，十次会有九次丢掉“s", 甚至恨不得对英国首相说，可不可以改掉这些繁琐的东西

这段话留这儿算是个学习过程的记录吧。 唉！英文，正如许多英文老师所说：“English is crazy"

发现其它问题盼告知， 交流是最好的学习方法。谢谢。

[qinghongh]

After <Last Night>


Last Night is a really special night!
Although it is over,
who knows,
It's black or white?
Who knows,
It's heavy or light?
Who knows,
It's wrong or right?
and who knows,
It’s bitter or sweet?

Doesn't matter what it is.
But a dream,
a sweet dream has already come to Last Night.
Let Last Night,
always be in your heart!

Best wishes,
Good night and good Last Night!
Keep that sweet dream,
and the tomorrow will be bright.

[William Zhou周道模]

[Lake]

一读起 last night 很自然就理解成”昨晚“，作为状语。 要表达“最后的夜晚/最后一夜”，名词，还是加一个冠词 ”the“，比较清楚。 如”最后的晚餐“-the Last Supper. 如果特指，也可象qinghong那样用大写。

"you fly by the breeze
and then suddenly disappeared "

"fly" and "disappeared" 时态不一致。

"those white papers gather clouds
falling, slowly"

这句不大清楚。

...

qinghong 的小诗挺顺。

题目：Follow <Last Night>, 一般好像是用 After...

"Let last night,
Always be in your heart!"

will always be in your heart ?

浅见，说得不对的别采纳。
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[qinghongh]

谢谢Lake, 用after 比follow好。

用be是因为前面的let，后面应接动词原形。对不对？

[Lake]

你是对的。看花眼了。
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[白水]

[白水]

[白水]

[Lake]

好，继续讨论。

单把 last night 拎出来，没有上下文很难说得清是昨夜或最后一夜。不像 the last lesson /class (最后一课), the last bus (末班车), the last leaf (最后一片树叶)...一目了然.

"those white papers gather clouds
falling, slowly"

这句不大清楚。 "

我想说的是，句子的层次不清楚。两个动词，哪个是主，哪个是伴随？我刚读时还以为clouds在falling呢。

这只是我的感觉，其他读者可能没有这样的问题。由此看来，我读得是多么仔细啊！
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[白水]

lake,你读诗歌够仔细，读回帖可不仔细。 last night 问题看这：

[白水]

"those white papers gather clouds
falling, slowly"
你没的说错，是clouds在falling。My Dear Lake, pls展开你的想象的翅膀（套磁，酸一个wink:），那些白纸（或纸灰）飘在天上（像鸟，蝴蝶）去捕捉，采集云彩并和其滚成一团的景象，然后Falling，，，，，，这么美的景象居然没反应，伤心
打字好麻烦呵 。。。。。。。。。 :

[Lake]

[Lake]

[白水]

Last Night

It's over
I know, all is done
like white paper gathering cloud
floatting, falling
slowly and slowly
as a soft quilt over an exhausted body

it is a dream
I know, it's a sweet dream with bitter

who is in the cloud swirling in shiny skirt
flying with breeze
and then fading into the sky

"where are you?"
I cry: " where are you?!"
and I can not see
I cry, again
and again

(March 12/2010 3.30am)

[白水]