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佛不在庙里,佛在路上
沙漠
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PostPosted: 2007-03-07 02:15:46    Post subject: 佛不在庙里,佛在路上 Reply with quote


佛不在庙里,佛在路上


佛的心中一片蔚蓝
佛轻轻挥动手中绿绿的柳枝
洒几滴净水
天空就飘起祥云
花开了,柳绿了,水清了,桃红了
鳄鱼的眼泪
蕴满善良

洒几滴净水
就把“灾难”从字典里洗去
瘟疫不见了
空难矿难消遁了
海啸飓风全停息了
一幅画鲜活地生长出来
画里画外,我可以斜靠在高背椅里
脸上堆满歌舞升平

这全是真的么?

佛啊,你在哪里
你就轻轻挥动柳枝,洒几滴净水吗
我看见可爱的清澈的眸子里
漂浮残败的枯叶,欢欣被击落
血沁进泥土,渐渐冰凉
渐渐冰凉的还有炊烟

佛啊,你在哪里
一座庙宇坐落深山,木鱼“的的”地响
大门朝南,善男信女鱼贯进出
你一声阿弥陀佛
就大慈大悲,心安理得了么?
佛不在庙里,佛在路上啊

我看见佛的慈祥
开一朵美丽的莲花
落在人间。谁伸出一双佛手
把沉甸甸的行囊,驮在背上?
心中有佛,还需要艰难行走啊
虔诚,才是佛心中的那一片蔚蓝
佛不在庙里,佛在路上!

佛,就是你呀,我的人类!
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白水
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PostPosted: 2007-03-07 16:40:03    Post subject: Reply with quote

沙漠, 最后一句去掉似更好些. 己见, 不妥见谅. Embarassed
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三色堇
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PostPosted: 2007-03-07 19:33:42    Post subject: Reply with quote

同意白水的看法,.问好.
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下一个偶像是野兽
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PostPosted: 2007-03-08 00:29:30    Post subject: Reply with quote

诗的名字意境已经足够!

呵呵。感觉内容越少越好
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闻风
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PostPosted: 2007-03-08 08:23:33    Post subject: Reply with quote

问好,学习着~~~
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PostPosted: 2007-03-09 19:12:52    Post subject: Reply with quote

很好的诗
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司马策风
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PostPosted: 2007-03-09 21:42:47    Post subject: Reply with quote

感觉可勉去最后一句。中间似可稍做凝练更好。

问好
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