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<七律>诗
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PostPosted: 2007-02-26 05:57:06    Post subject: <七律>诗 Reply with quote

<七律>诗

余香烟袅烬三支, 倦倚西窗暮色迟
落日残红焚乱岗, 浓云凝泪浸相思
荷塘波涌蓬莱曲, 竹苑风吟淑玉词
古寺青灯空对月, 菩提心语静为诗


<七律>临屏草和颤抖和诗:

看破三春始有思, 木鱼敲断赋新词
一支残烛红尘尽, 半卷红楼恨悟迟
颤抖举杯吟皓月, 方知美酒更留诗
古今多少文坛客, 俗雅天涯共此时

颤抖原玉:
哈~~酒诗为证:

伤春绣女往来思,
怅问贤儒嘛为诗?
明尧其歌当久远,
红楼之曲历今时。
人生有叹佛光灿,
物动无情鬼眼痴。
自古文学深在悟,
雅俗不系几人知!

如何?酒后乱作,见谅,见谅~~哈~
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PostPosted: 2007-02-26 07:35:58    Post subject: Reply with quote

亂岡的岡是平聲字。
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白水
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PostPosted: 2007-02-26 07:51:46    Post subject: Reply with quote

戴玨 wrote:
亂岡的岡是平聲字。


谢谢商榷. 我写诗只用新韵. 新韵中岗为仄声
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PostPosted: 2007-03-02 10:12:35    Post subject: Re: <七律>诗 Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
<七律>诗

余香烟袅烬三支
倦倚西窗暮色迟
泣血残阳焚乱岗
浓云凝泪浸相思
荷塘波涌蓬莱曲
竹苑风吟淑玉词
古寺青灯空对月
菩提心语静为诗

俺是个新人。到处溜达浏览。发现无论是现代诗还是古体诗,白水大侠的作品透着才女的灵秀气和震撼人心的想象力。读后使人如临春风,似饮美酒,心旷神怡,饶怀三日。读着这首七律,似在讲一个动人的古代故事。我也来虚构个故事,试着和一首诗。我不懂律诗的平仄规矩,更无生花妙笔。只会写白话打油。顾不了格式,只求达意。一时兴起乱涂鸦。见笑了。

七律,和白水诗

青春蹉跎恰相知, (识)
倾心相恋语话迟,
缘浅情薄难比翼,
门殊户偏苦相思。(怎连枝)
海内知己幽梦会,
天涯情侣温旧词,(泪眼湿)
六千年后惊回首,
天上地下赋新诗。(永相依)
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PostPosted: 2007-03-02 19:22:28    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢华生和诗. 一时兴起涂鸦就能涂这么棒, 看来功底不浅. 希望能常读到你的作品.
我抽空会把当初朋友们的和诗ZT一点过来, 盼多交流.

问好元宵节
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PostPosted: 2007-03-22 16:40:25    Post subject: Reply with quote

<七律>临屏草和颤抖和诗:

看破三春始有思, 木鱼敲断赋新词
一支残烛红尘尽, 半卷红楼恨悟迟
颤抖举杯吟皓月, 方知美酒更留诗
古今多少文坛客, 俗雅天涯共此时



颤抖原玉:
(注: 这位是我最怕的, 常酒后题诗, 却才气逼人. 高兴了会出点律, 不是不懂, 就是想破规矩?我猜. Wink )

哈~~酒诗为证:

伤春绣女往来思,
怅问贤儒嘛为诗?
明尧其歌当久远,
红楼之曲历今时。
人生有叹佛光灿,
物动无情鬼眼痴。
自古文学深在悟,
雅俗不系几人知!

如何?酒后乱作,见谅,见谅~~哈~
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PostPosted: 2007-03-22 16:49:30    Post subject: Reply with quote

诗友和诗原玉:

*非常羡慕白水悟出了新道道。也凑几句高兴高兴!
冰清

菩提心语静为诗
风雨人间我自知
云白天蓝图逸趣
怒张蕴藉自由时
*怒张, 取笔力雄健之意。


*步韵试和一首

逸峰

话从心涌酿为诗
天籁自然山水知
海韵风吟通六合
茶香蟹醉月圆时

*俺先来跟白水、颤抖老师学,嘻~
丫丫
(注:其实这位是真高手, 就是喜欢调皮. 没有许多框框,反而令诗歌有了灵气 Very Happy )

顿首木鱼纤手支
呼长嚅短落涎迟
槌儿节点经书案
檀口反刍酒肉思
细细清宵弦外月
悠悠锦瑟柳边词
六根不净难成果
徒有香头剃度诗

先贴这些吧, 改日再贴.
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PostPosted: 2007-03-22 17:29:48    Post subject: Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:

颤抖原玉:
(注: 这位是我最怕的, 常酒后题诗, 却才气逼人. 高兴了会出点律, 不是不懂, 就是想破规矩?我猜. Wink )

哈~~酒诗为证:

怅问贤儒“嘛”为诗?

如何?酒后乱作,见谅,见谅~~哈~

敢问白水这位“颤抖”大侠是天津老乡吗?要不怎么“嘛-嘛”的。 Wink
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PostPosted: 2007-03-22 17:53:36    Post subject: Reply with quote

他乡客 wrote:
白水 Moonlight wrote:

颤抖原玉:
(注: 这位是我最怕的, 常酒后题诗, 却才气逼人. 高兴了会出点律, 不是不懂, 就是想破规矩?我猜. Wink )

哈~~酒诗为证:

怅问贤儒“嘛”为诗?

如何?酒后乱作,见谅,见谅~~哈~

敢问白水这位“颤抖”大侠是天津老乡吗?要不怎么“嘛-嘛”的。 Wink


问好他乡客. 我还真不知道. 网上的人都是影子, 我只欣赏才气和文字传递的友情.
这种随意拈来, 喜怒哀乐包括开心查询搞笑也能为诗,特别作和别人, 受题材限制, 没有点真功夫很难写出来的.这首'嘛'也是TA临屏而作. 还有那YY姐妹们, 几个小姑娘好生了得, 我后来楞是不敢再和.冰清, 逸峰都是为人很好的老师. 抽空整理一下算是保存一段往事吧.
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