sōusuǒdào 22 gèfúhédenèiróng

I like your observation and the way you put it in words. After reading it, I had to remind myself of the usefulness of a hat (generally speaking), such as protection from bad weather.

It sounds a bit nursery rhyme to this reader.

Thanks! Agree. I still have not been able to reached another level in english learning.

The refrains are not quite effective as they should take on ...

When I was reading the line, I thought you meant : It’s time for water to subside and rocks to emerge.
If \'when\' has to be used, this to me sounds a little more natural though I prefer the one ab ...

beside the rock in salty air
retreats a tired and sleepy bear
high waves now start to pound his toes
long willow leaves then poke his nose
and flounders jump out everywhere

why does the bear wi ...

on the top of a hill, you gaze upon the moon, bright and yet silent. then you look down and see another moon in water. suddenly fish leap everywhere . o, there are more fish in the sea.

the line \' ...

i like this poem. Remembering the poet's words and what type of person he was is a very sincere way to honor his memory on his birthday (101st).

You are right, 'press' is normally used with 'lips'. Thanks. Now you know I don't know how to kiss.

Not the sun, the moon or the stars can compare
to your fair eyes, which power my feeble mind
melt my cold heart, and kindle my love's fire
to which my lonely soul longs to bind

as I lay my callo ...

Thank you.
I think we can write oversleeves as o'ersleeves to shorten the number of syllables

Thank you for your detailed reply.

1. my mistake for not recognizing that this is a ballad. I took 'tickling' as a 2-syllable word. sure there is no need of 'little' and 'gently',
2. I think I und ...

nice. i like it.
for a quick comment, i think

1. S2: 'to find' might have been misused,

2. S2: 'sweaty sticky' may be 'sweaty, sticky' or 'sweaty and sticky'?

3. S4: i would prefer adding ...

Thank you for spelling out pentameter. that is very helpful.

Thank you for reading it and for your great comments. I agree with you on your comments. I will try to improve those places.
PS: I read a poem of this form last night and then tried it myself. Each l ...

as autumn's fragrance fades out from the air
the wafting wind blows the unwilling leaves
whose richness soil now waits for, worn and bare

two trembling magpies hug under the eaves
and heavy clo ...

Yes. The previous line ends with 3 syllables (grass still green) and therefore I think it will have a better sound effect if the next line starts with 3 syllables because these two line segments are c ...

Beautiful! In the right season.
blasts ... brims... nice alliteration. this is one of the reasons poems are hard to get translated.
Personally I would prefer bloom to blossom in "'mums in bloss ...

spot on, just. I know 'snowdrops' is the name of a flower. since I don't want to repeat 'flakes' and could not find any other alternatives, so used 'snowdrops' to mean the accumulated lump of snow. ...

True, it is not a sonnet in the precise sense. Here the rhyme is ABAB CCDD EFFE GG (not defined anywhere)
Also instead of pentameter, I chose tetrameter (4-footed meter, inspired by Lord Tennyson's p ...

to 戏雨飞鹰

i envy not a wanton king
whose linens women's scents imbue
so scents they have, yet none a wing
his heaven thus no heaven true

i envy not zhuge the great
who seized and swept ...

very good descriptions.