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天一黑

?????16?

?????2007-08-30

?????fāsòngsīrénliúyán

cházhǎo天一黑fābiǎodesuǒyòutièzǐ

现代诗歌
西方文学 Western Literature
fābiǎoxīntiè   huífùtièzǐ
Please help to correct my poor English

I am a happy seed

I don’t need to look for sunshine

I don’t need to look for rain

And I don’t need to look for wind

In the spring, when I grow up, my green color will be very wonderful

In the summer, my flowers will be colorful

Butterflies will like me

Honeybees will like me

Girls will like me

Kids will like me

Ok, in the fall, I will return my fruits to them.

It is a wonderful life,

but a little boring, isn’t.

2007-09-11 23:11:22
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戴玨 ?2007-09-12 02:01:47?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


最後那句:
but a little boring, isn’t it?

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kokho ?2007-09-12 02:09:19?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


欢迎 新朋友 :)

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William Zhou周道模 ?2007-09-17 07:32:42?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


英语无大问题,只是诗的意象和立意不够“新”。
Lake ?2007-09-17 08:51:34?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


yǐnyòng:
I am a happy seed

I don’t need to look for sunshine

I don’t need to look for rain


万物生长靠太阳 Smile
我家后院种的荫生植物也多多少少需要一些阳光呢。 Smile

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