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?????2006-10-02

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cházhǎo白水fābiǎodesuǒyòutièzǐ

冷雨2011-10-06 02:16:37

问好临屏！
我想看到的就是古韵袅袅，其他的对我并不重要。

冷雨2010-12-24 06:15:09

问候白水，圣诞节快乐！！
清源留字

飞翔2010-10-23 18:06:10

问好! thanks byebye byebye byebye

亿七维2010-05-29 13:43:04

问好白水！

李盈枝2009-12-17 01:10:58

过来拜读先生的新诗佳作，希望能从中汲取营养，以提高自己旧体诗词的习作水平。顺便向先生问好并致意。

君山楚女2009-11-22 15:55:12

问候白水忘年兄。读您的作品，主我眼前一亮，慧心灵动。一篇好作品，一个好老师，确实能点破愚顽。

梦之2009-08-19 14:44:54

向姐姐问好！很欣赏你的作品。

梦之

zmj1662009-08-17 02:34:36

问好白水！

万春来2009-06-13 16:49:42

问候白水兄，前来问候！

莹雪2009-06-07 16:35:14

问好姐姐 thanks

西方文学　Western Literature

Great Dinner<盛宴>

<Great Dinner>

Deep autumn to the poets,
the season seems defoliated
with its colours damaged
to personify their sobs and sorrow

Walking along the path, I am
listening to the wind
in the rain.

Well, my poet
if your desire is as thin
as a piece of paper
do you wish to write about that
or the pallor of nobleness
or the extensions of imagined illness?

I have
cake to ease my hunger
as I type these words for you
a great dinner
is the bright moon
with twinkling stars

<盛宴>

深秋, 好象是专门留给诗人的
一些落叶, 一些残红
恰到好处的
掩盖着你的悲凉
和低泣
我漫步街头
沐雨听风

其实诗人
如果真的当你所有的
企求都薄成了
一张纸
那些无病呻吟
那些贵族的苍白
还顾及点墨吗?

我抓起最后一只烧饼
填充辘辘饥肠
然后悠闲的在键盘上敲
最丰盛的晚宴
莫过
皓洁的月
洒满晶莹的星星

2006-10-28 06:19:28

和平岛 ?2006-11-05 18:42:02?? Re: Great Dinner<盛宴>

just made some editing
may not be appropriate:

Deep autumn to poets,
the season seems just some defoliations
with colours damaged
to hide their sob and upset

Walking on the street, I am
listening to the wind
under the rain

Well, my poet
if your desire is as thin as a piece of paper
do you still want to write about that?
such as pallor of nobleness
Or just make a fuss on an imaginary illness

I hold the last cake to fill my hunger
then, type these words using my keyboard:
a great dinner
is the bright moon
with crystalloid stars

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白水 ?2006-11-05 20:04:30??

thank you for your edit. i will think it earnesstly

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白水 ?2006-11-11 16:44:15??

此诗歌贴到西人网站, 他们又改了点. 感觉读起来更顺些, 只是和中文意思远了点, 先存这儿吧, 以后再试.
Deep autumn to the poets,
the season seems defoliation
with its colours damaged
to personify their sobs and upset.

Walking on the street, I am
listening to wind
past rain.

Well, my poet
if your desire is thin
as a piece of paper
do you wish to write of that
or the nobleness of pallor
or extensions of imagined illness?

I have
cake to ease my hunger
as I type these words for you
a great dinner

is the moon
set with diademic stars

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kokho ?2006-12-05 13:03:22??

喜欢和平岛的：））

。。

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kokhoběiměifēngwénjí

白水 ?2006-12-05 17:16:38??

KOKHO, ARE YOU SUER PEACE'S IS BETTER THAN OTHER(I MEAN THAT IS NOT MY)? Very Happy

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kokho ?2006-12-06 11:00:07??

I am listening to wind past rain.

do you wish to write of that
or the nobleness of pallor
or extensions of imagined illness?

这几句很可能有问题。。

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kokhoběiměifēngwénjí

白水 ?2006-12-06 18:25:57??

kokho xièdào:

I am listening to wind past rain.

do you wish to write of that
or the nobleness of pallor
or extensions of imagined illness?

这几句很可能有问题。。

THANKS, I WILL THINK IT CONSCIENTIOUSLY

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白水 ?2006-12-13 19:30:41??

KOK, 我请教了我的英文老师, 正好她也喜欢诗歌, 还出了诗集. 她帮着改了点. 你说的没错, 老师说PEACE改的那首IS PERFECT. Very Happy

ANYWAY, THANK YOU VERY MUCH.

Deep autumn to the poets,
the season seems defoliated
with its colours damaged
to personify their sobs and sorrow

Walking on the street, I am
listening to the wind
in the rain.

Well, my poet
if your desire is as thin
as a piece of paper
do you wish to write about that
or the pallor of nobleness
or the extensions of imagined illness?

I have
cake to ease my hunger
as I type these words for you
a great dinner
is the bright moon
with diademic twinkling stars

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白水běiměifēngwénjí

kokho ?2006-12-13 20:20:53??

yǐnyòng:

Walking on the street

女人写诗，不要佣这样的句子；））

Strolling down the street

去看看 www.dictionary.com

每个字查查意思才用。英文字有的是中性的，有的带着情绪，或褒贬　：））

。。

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