天一黑
童生
注册时间: 2007-08-30
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 发表于: 2007-09-11 23:11:22 发表主题: Please help to correct my poor English |
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I am a happy seed
I don’t need to look for sunshine
I don’t need to look for rain
And I don’t need to look for wind
In the spring, when I grow up, my green color will be very wonderful
In the summer, my flowers will be colorful
Butterflies will like me
Honeybees will like me
Girls will like me
Kids will like me
Ok, in the fall, I will return my fruits to them.
It is a wonderful life,
but a little boring, isn’t. |
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戴玨
秀才
注册时间: 2007-01-03
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戴玨北美枫文集 |
| 发表于: 2007-09-12 02:01:47 发表主题: |
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最後那句：
but a little boring, isn’t it?
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I labour by singing light
我的blog
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kokho
进士出身
注册时间: 2006-11-30
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来自: Singapore
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| 发表于: 2007-09-12 02:09:19 发表主题: |
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欢迎 新朋友 ：）
。。
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乒乓、摄影、诗歌 |
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William Zhou周道模
探花
注册时间: 2007-06-10
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来自: 中国四川广汉
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| 发表于: 2007-09-17 07:32:42 发表主题: |
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英语无大问题，只是诗的意象和立意不够“新”。
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诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
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Lake
举人
注册时间: 2007-01-09
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I am a happy seed
I don’t need to look for sunshine
I don’t need to look for rain |
万物生长靠太阳 
我家后院种的荫生植物也多多少少需要一些阳光呢。
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins |
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