Haiku (51-60)

[Lake]

51
the rapids run wild
like an unbridled horse
gulls hover above

52
the shark hunts
the fish run
swirls of bloody water

53
a smile breaks free
thus a nirvana attained
content in thatched house

54
inside old dogs
are all old tricks
no room for new

55
safe in his locker
he fumbled to smoke a pot
as a lone owl cried

56
I hear her sing
her song knocks open my heart
on that very night

57
the following day
a cock crows to the new sun
moon down, life goes on

58
new born eagle
waits in nest
watching mom fly

59
after the deluge
a wrecked boat afloat
her master unseen

60
the nest
made of twigs and leaves
heaven to birdies


感觉越来越粗糙了
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[William Zhou周道模]

要向你学习：多用短语、倒装等手法，这样语句才会丰富。第57首音韵效果特别好！
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诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
周道模

[kokho]

59
after the deluge
a wrecked boat afloat
her master unseen

55
safe in his locker
he fumbled to smoke a pot
as a lone owl cried


57
the following day
a cock crows to the new sun
moon down, life goes on

53
a smile breaks free
thus a nirvana attained
content in thatched house

《》ｒａｎｋｉｎｇ　ｙｏｕｒ　ａｔｔａｉｎｍｅｎｔ　；）

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乒乓、摄影、诗歌

[Lake]

[Lake]

[William Zhou周道模]

当然也要向其他几位学习，向所有提意见的朋友学习。我是特指你批评我句式的单一，我今后用英语写作时会特别注意。
你的57音韵效果一读一听就出来了： sun ... down ... on !
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诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
周道模

[kokho]

he fumbled to smoke a pot
as a lone owl cried

《》The contrast and surprise of choice of imagery

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乒乓、摄影、诗歌

[Lake]

[Lake]

[kokho]

Some more please

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乒乓、摄影、诗歌