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				|  Posted: 2013-04-30 04:30:12    Post subject: pus in the ground (for those died in the earthquake) |   |  
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				| pus in the ground (for those died in the earthquake) 
 
 call it whatever you want
 I see debris as always
 mixed with blood
 
 yes, look it up in a new dictionary
 where all last
 names are listed
 
 recall them one more time
 they shaked our tonsils
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				|  Posted: 2013-04-30 21:03:47    Post subject: |   |  
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	  | pus in the ground (for those died in the earthquake) they shaked our tonsils
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 good.
 
 Is 'shaked' acceptable these days.
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				|  Posted: 2013-04-30 22:29:46    Post subject: |   |  
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				| the simple answer is "shaked" does not appear in a standard dictionary,
 it is a dialectal past tense of shake.
 (then why do I use it?)
 
 "yes, look it up in a new dictionary"
 
 in the poem, it implies earthquake is accidental, non-standard?
 and is to remind people of the quake ( a synonym of shake),
 I keep the ake also to imply ache, the exact sound effect is carried over,
 such  that  "tonsils" hurt.
 
 Then the dictioanry is really not a dictinary, but a list of names,
 we look it up to find those who died; we do look up, don't we?.
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				|  Posted: 2013-04-30 22:55:10    Post subject: |   |  
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				| I like the sound of it even though it is not found in a dictionary. _________________
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				|  Posted: 2013-04-30 23:10:38    Post subject: |   |  
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				| Even Shakespeare used slang.   
 
 the poetics here is
 pass the normal past (tense)
 to see the present
 
 (this is of course not taught in school, that's why it is poetry)
 
 skaked is used dialectally, street language too.
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				|  Posted: 2013-05-02 13:37:29    Post subject: |   |  
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				| I am painting your brain with words as colors
 Put you through an MRI
 what is reflected
 those images you created
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