Whole <> 全部 - Ms Slavick

[kokho]

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<> Madeleine Marie Slavick

Cut some green out
for a little fresh shirt
or frilly kitchen curtains
and you’ve orphaned a shrub
Green lives the need to express
wraps hills with respect
makes grassland honest
seduces moss
affirms trees
and vines decide its maze

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翻译 <> 郑单衣

剪掉一些綠色
為一小件新襯衫
或帶花邊的廚房窗簾
你使一株灌木成了孤兒
綠色為表達意願而活著
充滿敬畏纏繞山丘
用誠實生出草地
誘導苔蘚
攀上樹梢
藤蔓們設計著自己的迷宮

A resident of Hong Kong for more than a decade, Madeleine Marie Slavick's work has been published and exhibited in Hong Kong, Japan, Singapore and the United States. She is a leading member of Outloud, Hong Kong's highly successful society of English-language poets, and her work is included in the Outloud anthology. In addition to Round, co-authored with Barbara Baker, she has co-authored two books on China: Children in China (also with Barbara Baker) and China, The Dragon Awakes.
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乒乓、摄影、诗歌

[和平岛]

英文的句子结构清晰,使理解比较容易

而中文，更灵活和多解性

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綠色——
為表達意願而活著
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如果这样排一下，就不会让读者误读

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写诗是为了写更好的诗

[Lake]

短小精悍，清新雅致。诗人以简洁生动的语言称颂绿，亦即大自然。
诗的前四行讲了绿如何变得残缺，后六行绿的完整。
人类难道不应该敬畏大自然，善待大自然吗？
人和自然是一个整体，Oneness, Wholeness.
诗将绿拟人化。几个动词的连用， lives, wraps, makes,seduces affirms,使得节奏感强，语气肯定 affirmative tone, 赋予绿人格特征。

译文也很精炼。其中

[kokho]

热情的讨论。。。

我去请她来　

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乒乓、摄影、诗歌